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its so funny playing games with characters that have either my name or part of it LOL

ah ty! lol my spell check failed that. 
and ahhhh that makes a lot more sense LOL

Quinn: "whats your name?"
Quin: "...Quin"
Quinn: "what kind of name is that???"
WE HAVE THE SAME NAME

BRO MY NAME'S QUIN UHHHHHHHHHH WHAT DO I DO THIS IS A LITTLE WEIRD

love this game! (though the they/them option doesnt work for the first story as the jester refers to the mc as queen if you choose that option) heres a few grammer mistakes/ways to make it more clearer/cleaner i noticed here to help! (i can do more if you'd like but heres four to start ^^ keep up the great work!) 

-"wait a second... isnt that- he is... the jester puppet, he...move on his own"
-"wait a second... isnt that- the...jester-?" (its implied hes a puppet already so doensnt need to be stated) "it...can move on it's own" (mc doesnt know hes a being yet so it doesnt really make sence to refer to him in any way other than it) 

-"at that momment, i believed it after seeing Knight puppet and jester puppet with my own eyes and mind" 
-(personally i feel like this would be clearer without this line but if you wanted to keep it id suggest writing it after the next line and phrasing it as either "This proves it" or "the owner was serious...i saw them moving right in front of my own eyes..." or you could also have it be more the mc thinking theyre dreaming and fighting with themselves that this couldnt be real)

-"he carressing my arm gently with his puppet hand"
-"he carressed" (youre writing in past tense but if you wanted to write in present tense you'd phrase it as "his hand carressing my arm gently") "my arm gently, the rough/smooth wooden hand leaving goosebumps in its wake" (id recomend using puppet a lot less and start describing the feeling of things to really bring in the reader)

-"i reply in a nervous voice, laced in fear"
-"my voice trembled as i swallowed the lump in my throat, trying desperatly to apear calm" or if you wanted to keep it closer to youre original wringing, "i replied nervously, my voice trembling in fear" (use replied as your sentance starts in present tence and ends in past tence)

just save before hand and try it a few times! i won on my 4th attempt! (im pretty sure its random as it changed every time)

This game actually reminded me to go brush my teeth XD

OMG I WOULD NEVER CHOOSE THE "GOOD" ENDING WHAT???? MISAKI DIES???????? NO WAY AM I EVER LETTING HER DIE SHES MY BABY AND LOVE AND UGH 

mg its a yandere? do you not know what that is? and while i didnt try to go against Perriot, you were able too multiple times, and at the end you could send him away if you wanted? plus in the drugged area he didnt do anything to you but chain you to a bed so-